ModPo - Week - 9 - Some trends in recent poetry: Chance

           In week 9 there was an interesting task by instructors. They have given a link of “Mesostomatic” - a poem generator and instructed us to generate a poem. I have taken a poem “Pain” by jayanta Mahapatra and copied it in the Mesostomatic - poem generator and I have selected a phrase “Pain to Life” as a spine of my poem.

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Stands blood to blood to understand well Pursued over
                                                                          And the skys
                                                                      heIghts it holds itself
                                         fast the mist of giviNg my mind

                                                                    liTtle rest small shelter where are
                                                leaves that cOmmanded heart disturbing those


                                                                  cLouds
                                                                whIch
                                      are the secrets oF
                                                                 thE sky will my swallowed the sky veil
    
           In this poem the concept of pain has described. The first line /stands blood to blood/ may suggest every human being or also we can say each spice, the understanding of harming each other well. This is the basic fundamental of each spice that if one harms you then the person who victimized by another will take revenge definitely and all social as well as wild animals have better understanding of harming each other. The heights of sky holds the mist, when there is mist our vision is not clear and same when we want to take revenge we only think about giving pain to others, same way when we are in pain we cannot enjoy our life. The mist of revenge and pain has controlled the mind, and heights of sky suggest the ego of a person, and that heights giving mist (unclear vision towards moral values) to the mind of a person.
       
         In the next stanza there is description of a tree, it gives us shelter, so the tree is giving very small and little shelter and when we are in the shelter of someone we are under their control and that is why the line /leaves commanded heart/ has used. Leaves of the shelter have commanded heart but heart is disturbing because of the clouds. Clouds are in the sky and sky contains secrets of the poet. In this stanza the sky is may be the divine God, or it can be consciousness of the poet which is controlled by the agony and suffering; and that sky has swallowed the veil from poet’s emotions and that is why the heart is disturbed but now everything is clear.
     
        The poem is full of metaphors, first is Sky, first it was used to represent ego of the person and we can also connect it with the height of pain, second time it has used as /the secrets oF thE sky will my swallowed the sky veil/ like that ego has swallowed the happiness of life and filled it with pain and another interpretation can be the sky is divine power which has destroyed the ego and gives punishment for sins. The metaphor of Tree used as the turning point in the poem, it can be used negatively as well as positively; may be the shelter has given a sense and because of the commands of leaves the consciousness of poet has evoked. It suggests the journey of pain to life and it is the pain of revenge and illness of mind. One can suffer till the person can feel emotions but when we make ourselves free from our ego and revenge we may get free from pain and get our life.

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